Excellent story!!
This is probably the best story plot I've ever seen on newgrounds, by far. So this is all I'm rating this piece on. The art is extremely stylish and obviously neil is very adept with a tablet (I assume that's what he's using), but this could triple in quality and effect if there are more abundant animation/tweens on limbs, heads, etc. Other than that is the sound, goddamn you need to get some voice acting on this, cuz it will just rule. When I read the fleeting lines (which is by the way, a little fast paced), I was imagining some great voice was saying them. Seriously, it could get so much better, and will rule the portal any time. Until then, sorry, this deserves only a 3 from me.